All Comments on 'China doll'

But this one really brings out your particular voice. There's this wonderful shell, very delicate, over an undercurrent of anger. Really good work.

I liked it too, soft and sweet. I do agree with Eve, but UYS, you're a wonderful poet, with a gentle touch.

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Last line is fantastic. Some other good lines: fill a doll sized shoe/beneath each pleat creased and placed just so. There are parts of the poem that could be improved: Each dainty toe/fragile flower/petals unopened/Breasts but twin buds -- kind of cliche phrases.

Makes submission sound so delicate and sweet.

has been recommended in the New Poems Reviews thread today on Literotica's Poetry Feedback and Discussion forum. Thanks for the read!