All Comments on 'Clit Split'

nice fun poem, it was effective and smooth, and left me licking my lips ,just thinking of licking lips.

I like the lickity split meals <grin> and I loved your "HOT" erotic poem <smile> nice write RF

And your selection of mostly short words and very short lines adds to the poems structure and power!

and repetition add a pace to the poem which is effective, but I found the wording more about mechanics than sensation or intimacy, more telling what is happening than showing what is being experienced. I read a narrative rather than being drawn into the words. I think if rather than describe what is happening, try to express what is being felt emotionally and physically, if you work toward that you can draw your reader into the poetry.

jim : )

Hot poem! I loved the way the words flowed in your poem, mirroring the images you created. Great stuff!

A good Sunday wake em up...

(I know - I'm running late - tastes good anyway)

Are we talking fast food here? Finger lickin' good. Very fun and very hot read RF.

ty,bd

Wow! This is just awesome. A few very effective choice words, mmmm.

Love it.