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Click hereIn my hearts winter
Hides desire
And passion sleeps
I wait for you
Waiting for our breaths to mix
To burst into flames
Night blankets the sky with stars
Under the glistening blanket
Naked, I lay waiting
For you to consume me
To warm me with your touch
To revive me with your fire
Dawn lights the winter morn
As I lust for your warmth
I want you inside
Devouring my mouth
Tongue dancing with tongue
Skin sliding against silken skin
Plunge through the frozen mist
Satisfy pleasures, wants, and needs
Release me
Show me the alter of lust
Climb higher to the edge
Come for me.
Again you amaze me. Your poem speaks clearly of passion and emotion. Nicely done, Elf!
with sack, because I feel it will go better with "passion sleeps"...
"desire hides
and passion sleeps"
but it is a minor quibble at best. I like this just fine the way it is.
I would only change "hides desire" to "desire hides" to improve readability.
Great images here and a wonderful sensation to boot. I thought the flow was just a little choppy in the middle, but the crips picture painted more than makes up for that. I don't know about anyone else, but I'll certainly be at your door in a moments notice, waiting to take full advantage of those glisenting stars your lying naked under. ;)
I really did love it. Sorry about the double post....I meant to give you a 100 but hit submit before clicking on the rate.
~Ronin.
Moonie, just say "when" and I'm there! Wonderful play with words here. Well done. ~Ronin.
An erotic piece of work, Elfie. Keep it up, I'll fall in love with you yet. ;) :D ~Minx