All Comments on 'Come For Me'

Romantic and erotic.

Liked it.

Thanks.

~ J

An erotic piece of work, Elfie. Keep it up, I'll fall in love with you yet. ;) :D ~Minx

Moonie, just say "when" and I'm there! Wonderful play with words here. Well done. ~Ronin.

I really did love it. Sorry about the double post....I meant to give you a 100 but hit submit before clicking on the rate.

~Ronin.

Great images here and a wonderful sensation to boot. I thought the flow was just a little choppy in the middle, but the crips picture painted more than makes up for that. I don't know about anyone else, but I'll certainly be at your door in a moments notice, waiting to take full advantage of those glisenting stars your lying naked under. ;)

Beautifully done!!!

Loved the poem, the visuals..

~Honey

You definitely have a way with words.

I would only change "hides desire" to "desire hides" to improve readability.

with sack, because I feel it will go better with "passion sleeps"...

"desire hides

and passion sleeps"

but it is a minor quibble at best. I like this just fine the way it is.

Again you amaze me. Your poem speaks clearly of passion and emotion. Nicely done, Elf!