All Comments on 'Come Running'

The opening line gives a hint the subject is an observed stranger and the speaker keeps the fantasy to herself. The only clue to the sex of speaker is the author's name, which is never a reliable indicator. The "stranger" image is contradicted in L8, when she is "Trying to ruin your resolve to keep control." This is someone she knows, at least well enough to recognize his need for control. The poem takes a strange turn at L13, "So sleep now while you have the opportunity." The speaker is watching someone while they sleep. Is the subject sleeping on a bus or train? Perhaps a burglar has found someone in the house. The burglar would have more privacy. It adds a bizarre element to the fantasy.

--you have one good line then a cliche, and so on. There is tons of good stuff here, but it doesn't quite hang together, because the cliches get in the way. Please work at it a little more--it's worth it:)

Sweet and sensuous.....well done....would love to see more writing from you..... :)

The first line contradicts the last two which is confusing

that some of the reviewers compare you to another poet. It is supposed to be about the poems, not the writer. I liked your poem. And gave it a 5.