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by PiperHamlin
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Anonymousover 5 years agoyou get eye strain reading
this staccato list in 1950's beat format, some nice lines but lose impact in this format
johntcookseyover 5 years agoOne word per line ...
...interrupts the smooth flow and replaces it with a demanding pow pow pow rhythm that crescendos urgently towards the climax. An intense multi sensory explosion sculpted with mere letters and words. Very nice.
Anonymousover 3 years agoNice visuals...I very much enjoyed it!
I liked the pacing. It certainly added to the tension. I can visualize you writhing, sweaty, tangled in the sheets with the unseen lover buried between your thighs under the comforter while West African percussion plays faintly in another room
Love your work
~Enkidu
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