by seranade
wow very good, loved the way it flowed
perhaps one more verse, seem to leave me hanging
but a very very good peice, bro!
those senderas (grin)
excellent poem~
Good imagery, you didn't seem to be "fishing" for the rhymes which often detracts from a poem of this nature. Be careful of it's/its....otherwise effective!
I've heard that ritual many times. "Sendera" - path, trail. Good, unforced rhymes, although the last stanza with all the "ng" endings jangled a bit. (I wondered if you could have found words ending in vowel sounds, like "o" or "u"...)
I think "lovers" should have been "lover's" and "it's" should have been "its." But you've written us a very good poem!
I agree with the other comments. You might consider changing "it's luster" to "his luster". You avoid the apostrophe problem that way, and I think humanize the coyote some more.
Concur with earlier comments. To fix, move the apostrophe from it's to lovers and that only significant issue is resolved. Very nice character piece.