All Comments on 'Crocodile Tears'

but could be tightened further. The feeling has been done well but you need to avoid stale language and cliches. The title is cliched, for example.

I liked the lines:

"Leaving a trail,

of slug-like silver"

More of that is needed in the poem.

Still, a good start

This poem was mentioned in Wednesday's New Poems Reviews.

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Hi. I read your poem and I have to agree with vampiredust. Keep writing. You're doing a good job. :)