All Comments on 'Darkest Hour'

I like this a lot, it's erotic but also it tells of a longing for his lost love that can't be entirely assuaged by another

I especially like the line

'Painting every passionate moment into my heart'

Mmmmmm sounds like something I've written.....well done :)

it sounds like something others have written, then you probably need to revise it.I saw several lines that are used in almost every erotic poem here. Sucking, licking....over me.... try to think of new ways to describe these actions and then you will have a unique poem, one that is all yours.

BUT, keep writing, never give up. You learn and grow with each new line :)