All Comments on 'deja you'

a nice poem that I enjoyed

This poem appealed to my appreciaton of the darker side of life because of these four --and in my opinion-- critical lines:

"my lovely mess

whom ill kiss

despite bared teeth and

a feigned aloofness"

You handled the words very well, portraying something that felt incredibly honest. You accomplished a lot in a little amount of time. I felt like I was moving along with with the poem; Nice movement, well done.

you continue to be one of the most interesting and innovative poets here. More than a state of mind, just a touch beyond your consciousness. Well done...

jim : )

watch me unwind

winding down a

spiral of

sugar coated

loveliness

my lovely mess

Really good lines. The ending was superb! Thanks for the read.

Reading this causes a visceral reaction. Something inside catches on the ribs, holds and then finally, I breathe.

…it's not just a kiss