All Comments on 'disturbed'

Really good reading. Love the last strophe.

This is the second very impressive first poem today, so I'll request the same thing from you.

Stick around.

Some very good lines for a first posted poem. I look forward to more.

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This poem has a lot of powerful images in it. Very nice work.

An aptly named dark write

Subtle pain directed to the mind;

Welcome to Lit

Take off your coat, break out the pen

And stay awhile.

meeting a love that has broken your heart, and the aftermath. i loved a number of the images. "eyes that remind me of fallen leaves and rotten apples." very sharp images.

This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 38,000 poems.

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