All Comments on 'Drum Beats Me'

the whole 'god's not going to help you' is laugh out loud, satire of a bondage poem.

I agree though, the third stanza ruins any chance the poem had.

You definitely have some good lines in this poem. It could use some more work. Keep writing. Your poem is mentioned on literotica's poetry forum on the new poems thread.

This is pretty good. Suggest you leave out the 'fuck' and say put in say a 'scream'.'fuck' is too dominant. I wouldn't titivate it too much more than that.

Damn, you didn't use any of bflagsst's seven forbidden words and he still gave you only 50%. Maybe he doesn't like the subject matter?

I really like this until the third stanza...then the tone changes quite a bit. It seems almost like two different poems.

But I really did like the first two stanzas. Good job!

Well done! You say that poetry isn't your thing but you do yourself an injustice. I look forward to seeing much more from you

which seems very snare drum-like. Very interesting idea and pretty well executed. I'd like to see you write more poems.

Thank you everyone for your comments and suggestions. I'm humbled by the response from the Lit poetry community. I'm so very grateful for your encouragement.

Smiles - K