by Professori13
Interesting but not but teehere is no room for movement it is a rigid llist that gives a reader not k ch. Feels more like a shopping list to me. Show me how she would do this, make me feel either your domination or her submission, or both. Just some thoughts
Maybe take a look Sr honey adoreds piece on bdsm it is a similar running list poem but it use a good sonic structure and shows her submission.