All Comments on 'Expectations Disintegrate II'

but didnt love it even though I did give you a five. Because it touched my heart in a sentimental way.

I think you could rework the structure in this piece and make it somewhat better. A few of the lines are way too long and you really should lose the word "false" in front of facade.

To me, facade already implies falseness.

I enjoyed the read and hope to see more, as I agree with the assertions in your work, mostly.

:)

nj