All Comments on 'Fear'

Dem ?

Haunting, demure. If Ash's perspective is what you had in mind, and it's a good take even if it isn't what you had in mind, "a voice that rings out that's amplified/past recognition" doesn't work well for me because the narrative should support words in a different language (eg German vs. other [mostly] Eastern European languages or the Yiddish of the diaspora.) If fear on the other hand prevents recognition, "amplification" for me is an image that would otherwise suggest clarification. While "amplification" indeed might suggest "shouting" and therefore "fear beyond recognition," I wonder if there was a better choice of a word available.

Everything else in the poem "shouts" fear to me.

Please accept this as constructive feedback from someone who admires your poetry on Lit. You have a way with blank verse that surpasses anyone writing here IMO. Maybe it's because I've read you alot, but it felt to me like meter superseded the narrative.