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erectus123erectus123almost 11 years ago
good rhyme

although "Why don't I feel the pain no more," is a bit jarring , why not say "any more"? but perhaps you have reason?

fantsiifantsiialmost 11 years agoAuthor
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I used 'no more' instead of 'anymore' because I didn't want to use repetition, as I have used 'anymore' already in the previous stanza, in the second line :)

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Hello, my name is Fanny and I'm 23 years old. I live in London, and I enjoy writing erotic novels. I enjoy writing erotic stories and novels just as much as poems. I'm more likely to write stories about BDSM, fetish play, les groupe de trois and same-sex intercourse. I hope y...