All Comments on 'Finally beside you.'

I like what this poem has to say and that it says it in such a simple, straightforwatd way. :)

I think you could really strengthen it by reformatting some so that the look of the words reflect the content of the poem. I'd run the lines where you describe feeling behind, unable to keep up actually behind the ones that describe the other person as being ahead (i.e., indent those). Then at the end they could have the same margin. Just an idea, but it could give this piece real visual impact. It's good either way, though!

I just kept on walking. Not what you were looking for

but my latest example of forgetting there is no "i" in

team. You have a good poem here. It is simple yet

carries a weight of truth.

This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 39,000 poems.

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