All Comments on 'First love First pain'

it is quite good at seeing it's way out of situations that it fears.

This is a nice piece of work with great emotion but some of the sentences should be reworked.

"Turgid" is correctly used but I wonder how many readers might have understood "swelling" instead?

A few comas or periods might be useful in a number of other places, as in "But alas, I know I never will. You are my first true love. I will never forget you or forgive you."

or "You look at me with bewilderment, wanting me, needing me but still pushing away."

and "(Once we had) A momentary glimpse into a life you'll never consummate. You have so many fears about coming out, not willing to lose your family. (Are you) willing to hide in the dark and never be happy?"

These are just a few suggestions to make clear your words that run on a bit, more suited to spoken dialogue perhaps then the form used.