All Comments on 'Flame'

Lots of hot, fire stuff going on here. Fire is used quite a bit in erotic poetry. Quite a bit.

The theme and metaphor are very popular on Literotica,

consequently it can be difficult to present the "fire of passion" in words that do not seem hackneyed.

The poem also might benefit from less "You take me, I am hot!" telling,

and more descriptive showing.

Keep writing!