All Comments on 'Flame'

I like the gentle eroticism in this, and the way you used the form to reinforce the words. Climbing down the rope makes you slow down the read, as one might carefully descend a sheet rope, and pulls you down into the desire and the escape. This is a good one for you to return to submissions with. I hope there will be more to come.

this nicely subtle erotic had a twist of loneliness used as the catalyst

to burn an evening with someone

in the hope that you can escape that feeling

I like the idea of the tattered sheets they’ve been lived in, this isn’t some first time trust but a night of two people giving to eachother even if it’s been complicated and a struggle

Dunno if it’s just my mind but a small homage to the bdsm I puke maybe highlight that with a different enjamb

I.e

a much safer warmth twists and ties

them end to end

but all in all a solid 5

Thanks for the read