All Comments on 'Float'

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lorencinolorencinoabout 16 years ago
So overwhelmed

Yes! So overwhelmed by the imagery that I didn't even notice the spelling mistake. It's an easy one to make or miss that it should probably be include in <i>Strunk's Elements of Style</i> if that were ever to be revised. <br><br>

The poem, however remains magnificent. That image of the heart moving aside to make room for the magic of communion is glorious.

jthserrajthserraabout 16 years ago
Well done

but I think you might be missing the e in a couple of your breaths... breathe in, breathe out

KOLKOREKOLKOREabout 16 years ago
Holding him by your breath

I had to struggle with some of the images, but the ending made it for me: "I breath your world in/and breath out life".

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