All Comments on 'For A Moment'

(I have not nor am going to rate your post).

* The 4th word is "was". This is already a small defeat, especially in a short poem. "Poetry is the art of words" (I said :) )--not a word or anything should be wasted.

* "full on unexpected" -- you phrase didn't contribute to poetry, it only gave a general idea to the reader instead of poetry. You could fill up the space taken by "WAS full on unexpected" by a meaningful image or you could simply skip it. If, by skipping your poetic placebo you didn't get a full poem then it'd mean that there was none. Adding placebo will not help (well, you may fool IGNORANT readers, but I hope that this is not your goal, you seem more ambitious than that).

* You have another "was" (in the 3rd sentence).

* "and then back to this"--that's an allusion, I guess, but certainly not poetry. You have five words but only one ("back") is artistically meaningful. Live long "art of words".

Best regards,