All Comments on 'Frosted Carnival'

You need to concentrate your edits here:

across the frozen terra.

Gray skies pregnant

with frozen drips of confused water.

Find an alternative for either the first or second "frozen." Reconsider pregnant. Pregnant skies/clouds have been done more than once before.

Otherwise, very enjoyable poem.

I am a huge fan of stream of consciousness poetry.

This fits. Thank you.

I tend to agree with WE.

Also, in my experience, 'comforters' tend to 'blanket', not 'skitter'.

with a great perspective...luv your work...smiles/bluerain

both description and thoughts about a prolonged winter. I'm an avid fan of watching the snow fall - and your phrase, "Snow flakes playing bumper cars outside my window" will be a new magical thought to enjoy with the very next snow we get! <smiles> Thank you for this piece.

Vixxx

Your poem has been mentioned on the new poem revies thread for Tuesday 22nd February.

no body Du like the Du~

I liked it <grin>

I want to throw the balls <lmao>

and win a barney <ha ha>

great poem Du~

This felt like a cold snowy day. Maybe one two many frozens, but snow doesn't always blanket, and skittering feels cold to me. Also really liked the snowflake bumpercars.

BD

Paints a vivid natural landscape.

and i thought it was summer, there i go with them thoughts again lol

nin-

This poem was selected from Lit's archive of over 39,500 poems for inclusion in today's Archival Review.<br>

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