All Comments on 'Girl Party'

I can go ac-dc anytime

This is really cool, I can totally picture it!

Once set to music, these lyrics will require massive re-writes. Each verse has a different cadence, so none of the verses will fit the same music.

Writing music isn't even close to writing fiction.

I suggest you concentrate on one or the other, and decide which one you want to truly suck at, because right now you suck at both, and that just pisses me off that I had hoped of finding something in your poetry that didn't sick and justified the time I wasted.