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by AnaDarkling

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DampKittenDampKitten2 months ago

Sounds like a time traveler. I like the concept.

The musical essence of this piece demands a more deliberate effort with your rhyme and meter. You might go back and rework it with that purpose in mind. Some of the stanzas are fab while others seem off balance.

Not sure if you want to make a poem 'to be continued'

but I bet you could write an awesome story in prose

AnaDarklingAnaDarkling2 months agoAuthor

Oh for sure! I hadn't written in a long, long time so this was one of the firsts that came to mind when I did decide to write. I might visit this one again some day and make a proper story out of it. Who knows!

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Lover of rain, food, music, books and poetry Life has been keeping me busy so I haven't been writing as much. On an ideal day I would be sitting in a tree writing my heart out about some flower that I thought looked pretty. Or something more sensual that deserves a lot more f...