All Comments on 'I found Breakfast in my Zen'

An unusual, imaginative write. Enjoyed reading this.

p.s your poem has been mentioned on the New Poem Review

simply awesome, My Zen friend (~_~) bows humble.

for zen...needs only a muffin to finish a zen meal...winks..blue

A zen breakfast

From ham and eggs;

A bit more complex than when eggs are scrambled

But far simpler than a monster omelet

Loaded with my favorites ~

Onions, peppers, cheese, tomatoes, and ham...

And now I'm hungry.

as is, is a serious attempt at profundity, a bad thing, a very bad thing. Despite the arrow down your throat and the fork and the knife it has no point. Slighly reworded you could have had a good ironic feel to it or a truer sense of acceptance of things. Zen, ham and eggs, knife and fork coupled with purpose, direction and filling - way too many ingredients, leave some of them out. It smacks of trying to overwhelm. Take this what it is - that's zen. Not that crap MET is selling.

I found Zen

this morning

over eggs and ham

slicing with a knife

uplifting with a fork

to place the arrow

down my throat

a sign of direction

for my purpose

to fill me.