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I really like this - it would be absolutely perfect if you played around with it to tighten and intensify the verse a little - a few thoughts -

ash covered the tongue...of molding bones...exposed the sex (get rid of some of the its in stanza 2)...the force within me keeps (or forces within me keep)...dump the 'the' before salaciousness

good stuff nonetheless. Sweet O.