All Comments on 'In My Mind's Eye'

I don't have the skills to do this like you do with poetry, so I try to do it with prose. I should have a story coming out in a day or so "Long Gone Lonesome Blues". Let me know what you think of the ending!

This brought out really deep emotions!

Thanks!

such as the black hole statement. I am less taken by:

I'm caught in its web

The poison consumes me

which comes off as more cliche

This poem could be a little shorter, which probably would make it all the more powerful.