All Comments on 'Insomnia'

You've got a great grasp on rhythm and imagery but there are some flaws in punctuation and grammar that knocked your rating down for me. If you're going to use it, in other words, use punctuation correctly or innovatively (such as e.e. cummings does in most of his poetry) or don't use it at all. This is my opinion only and shouldn't be misinterpreted as the only voice in the world of poetry. I don't profess to be "right"; I just needed to explain why I rated your poem the way I have. The subject matter is handled with really fine word choices and I understand exactly what it is that keeps your lyrical subject awake-- the "you" in your poem that is. I'm off to read more of today's subs from you. Thanks for sharing your work.