All Comments on 'It's Been Way Too Long'

Very, very nicely done.

Five glowing stars.

and more poetry too ;)

shows something,

also shows more cliched thinking

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That is a marvelous poem. Definitely a 5. Thank you so much. You are so right.

1201's right about the clichés, but also that this is more than the sort of stuff that it's hard to comment on at all. :)

i think what you have going for you here is a sense of timing - you're making the reader read this at the pace you want them to by way of your choice of line-breaks.

take care with your tenses, unless it was deliberate to swap back to present tense at the end - which you might well have.

the fact you're writing again is great - now, if you want to get more poetic with your writing (and that's your call) try looking again at the 'what you wanted to say' and experiment how, with fresher imagery, more sidelong glances, reaching a little more beyond the easy and over-used, at the 'how to say it'.

keep writing, and good luck with the journey!

MMMMMMmmmmmm! God that is hot!!! Making me nice and hard here!

But kind of a cliche here too. It is very hard to shine here with these kind of poems. You have to do something outstanding to stand out.

I can learn much from this. It is taken above the level of porn poem because of the format. Just great.

I like it. Very much.

Unfortunately I can emphasize with the title.

Very erotic in the suggestive way. I felt like I was there.

Sounds like there will be no sleep Tigerjen gets started. ;-)

I would love to read this for you tigerjen! It's stunning x