All Comments on 'Kiss Me'

In terms of metre or rhyme... I won't go there: that clearly wasn't your aim, Here.

In terms of playing with words to create a poetic impression, see the title I gave to this comment. In those terms it works brilliantly.

Eff

Simple and spare, and teasingly tempting. Your words draw us in for the kiss. Terrific.

Clever what you can do with a few words.

“Fine

Flesh

Feast“

pretty much describes what is going through my mind as I’m making love to my wife.