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LeBrozLeBrozabout 16 years ago
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A poignant and powerfully vivid snippet.

My Erotic TrailMy Erotic Trailabout 16 years ago
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I enjoyed your poem!

KOLKOREKOLKOREabout 16 years ago
immanent love and loss

Could not tell if the dying is human or not despite the talking line as I felt it might be an image of the perception. At any case it was poignant in conveying the immanent love and loss

normal jeannormal jeanabout 16 years ago
short

but sweet. The rhyme isn't overwhelming. nice work, Annie :)

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