All Comments on 'Let Me...'

While I do like the duality between the two strophes in the poem, I'm not so certain the message(s) contained within them do anything to open anyone's heart--wide or not.

That being said, I'm at a loss for suggestions to remedy it (if, in fact, it's not just my first impression and that anything needs to be remedied). Mostly, I think, the construct of the "let me"s opening each line limit how much can be done with said lines in a line-by-line manner.