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The previous comment on this poem is wrong. The repetition strengthens and re-inforces the emotion of the poem. His/Her alternative loses the effect, weakens the poem. Good work...

The repetitiveness Of your title weakens your poem IMHO. You might begin to think along the lines of something like:

"Let me . . .

Be in your arms tonight,

laying close to you

Look into your eyes

and slowly drink you in

Let me. . .

Slide my hands tenderly

where they want to go

Feel your hardness

growing in my hand

Let me . . .

guide you into me

making us complete

Let me love you forever

my friend, my lover, my love."

Just a suggestion on how you might alter the words for impact.