by PoissonSurLaLune
you devil. Damn red H's! Lit readers like a certain recipe in stories, and sometimes one or two bangs take your H straight to hell. I've read great stories that score a 4, and bad ones that score an H--go figure. You made me smile. Not sure, but maybe the As should be A's.
and some that could be better. I would reverse "misbegotten, shaky" for rhythm; I am no fan of capitalization of each line, and I think your poem is a good example of why I don't like it--it hinders the meaning; I would cut the last two lines which smack of you not meaning anything you have written earlier.
I only wrote this because I think there is a good poem in here. I hope you will take it in that part. Ty.
Cool lament. I struggled with what you are talking about. The easiest way to manage this problem is to imagine a situation that matches your theme and carefully describe what you see in your head, with care not to add details that do not enhance the poem. I sounds hard but it gets easier. You can actually write, so you will get there.