All Comments on 'Love Zik-Zak'

2000 lines someone might get to the end of it...that is to say it's kinda long, and the rhyme scheme not too cool, also your descriptive language is rather vulgar without being sexy - keep it up! hard to proceed when it is flaccid.

Thanks, I can see your points very well and I would not normally disagree. But in this instance I will not follow your advice for various reasons. "Erotic" can only be a very subjective opinion on one hand-and on the other, I've god too many pieces like this as parts of a much bigger story LEMONIA/EDELTRAUD, that without them my whole structure collapses. Perhaps my next poem (if approved) " FORWARDING PORNOGRAPHIC VERSE" will provide a minimum of explanation.

Thanks.