All Comments on 'Lovers Kissing'

You are telling me about the kiss, not showing it to me.

It is like describing a painting and not allowing anyone

to "feel" the art, all you have then is a list of objects in

the painting.

"A woman

sitting down

dressed in black

smiling"

Is this the same as the Mona Lisa?

Make me "feel" something with your poem!

Keep writing! >?)))><