by Icingsugar
I do like this poem, but I would space it differently (what else is new). I think your opening would be much stronger if you didn't separate the conclusion of the thought and wrote it like:
"I want to live
by the ocean,
so that I can
lick the salt
off your skin."
To me, that is a great opening statement.
I seem to be throwing fives around like confetti today.....and you, sir, are on a roll.
Tess
I read your Sig line, and thank god I did, what a hot hot hot poem, if I walked across this poem I would have burned the very soles of my feet, but I read it and burned the feet of my soul.
oh my
I liked that
:patting own self on back in giddy pleasure