All Comments on 'Masks Melt Away (Ghazal)'

Glancing at this, I expected it to be real bad, it's not. It's very good. You are in dangerous territory, with so many stock images, but adroitly miss most cliches. Very nicely done.

Now:

explain to me why it is a ghazal. And do think it would be better without that in the title, but that is just my personal prefence.

is quite good!

and i believe the title is stronger without the ghazal, unless there is something i'm not catching. but these two lines particular stands out the most for me:

For a moment masks melt away,

dripping to small corners of us.

I agree no need for the mention of the form used here... maybe an end note at the bottom of the poem ... with an explanation of the style... always a good learning tool. This is a beautiful whisper of romantic notions... I liked the metaphors used as well as the soft glow that surrounds the wording..

Du Lac~

Mentioned in the Sunday on Monday reviews

It feels like Mardi Gras vibrating into an alternate reality. I also really loved these two lines:

For a moment masks melt away,

dripping to small corners of us.

TY,

BD