All Comments on 'Memories from the Past'

You have a steady rhyme going for the entire poem

and then you drop it for one line, why?

How does the change strengthen the work?

You also do not pay enough attention to the rhythm of the lines.

True friendship is very valuable and deserves the best of efforts.

Think about it and perhaps consider a rewrite to smooth the poem's flow.

Good luck!

Words do not have to be spelled alike to sound similar and fit enough to a rhyme. In fact Mr. Shakespeare himself, whom I absolutely love, did not have perfect rhyme in all his stanzas. As for the flow, I have rewritten it several times. Perhaps the first was the best, I will revisit that. Yes friendship is important, but this poem more was inspired by missing my mother who died when I was 9 years old. It's about the memories, love, and friendship we have with loved ones that remains even when we are separated by death or distance. Perhaps I can make that more clear. Thank you for your comments I appreciate feedback. :-)

this rocks, the poem is great. and it's not so much about form as it is getting a message across, so forget about flow and rhyme and listen to what the woman has to say not critique her use of form and flow. just feel the poem.