All Comments on 'New Mown Lawns'

Check your grammar.

and well stated. I'm not sure whether "years" and "were" should be "year's" and "where" or not. The terms are correct or not depending on how one reads the poem. If they are typos, your meaning isn't clear unless they're fixed. Nice work. I look forward to seeing more of your poems.

Anonymous commenter: I'm all for careful proofreading--no poem should be posted without a spelling check and proof for other errors, imo. And if I make a mistake I want to know. Bear in mind though that some poetry is deliberately ambiguous. That may not be the case here, but unless you're certain isn't it better to query than assume? :)

You have a beautiful scene and a very strong, clear imagery in this poem. A good eye for fleeing details and a way to make simple things extraordinary.

However, to make it really perfect, you could had done some easy snipping and rearranging of words in some lines, that would had left you with a completely flawless meter and rhythm too. Since you aimed for structure and rhythm, you could had done it all the way..