by demure101
is hard to pull off. Pretty good, but too many "it's" in the first stanza IMO. I'd emphasize the central image as early as possible. The enjambment's pretty good. I particularly liked " ...houses. High/Up dirty gables.." I might have started the poem with L2S2, in fact, because it's so good.(There's that "it's" again. LOL)
"Losers Lane" felt like a cliché to be honest, particularly at the end of the poem.
All considered, however, I enjoyed reading it.
walking down, 1 struts 1 sags, need more to be said. TK U MLJ LV NV