All Comments on 'not quite free'

These first 5 lines make the poem for me. Very cummingsesque especially in line 3 in the loving language that itself is twisted around as if dizzy with love.

"declare me not sound of my mind"

"the thread

wraps around

a day after night after day after...

and Ms, as hard as I try

I still steal, my crime,

your every gesture, word, sound --

declare me not sound of my mind"

The last two lines fell short, I would like to order a different ending please.

~anna

and SJ probably wont like me saying that, I wont apologize :)

I like the ending, yes I do. Its well stated and romantic.