All Comments on 'Nothingness'

You're saying you're expressing supreme anxiety over what it is to be alive, yet you don't actually express any real feeling in the poem - such as the dread, terror, boredom. I'd suggest taking a personal experience, a panic attack, something that terrified you, a situation that no one else could know about, would feel the same way about, and make that your poem. The personal experience of whoever you are, what it is like for you to feel the anxiety/boredom of being you.