All Comments on 'Ode to the Goddess'

the more beautiful interpretations of how we got there that I've ever heard.

Excellent collaboration.

Don't lose that partner or that perspective

: )

Crisp!

Cute with innocent simplicity;

Nice touch with the ending.

A splendid idea to slant this so heavily toward a child's perspective.

Unlike any of the poems I've read by you. - this is original in both concept and phrasing .

If you decide to do edits on this, my suggestion would be to slant it even more toward the child, removing the semblance of adulthood by "unrepairing" the building - (punctuation, sentence structure, etc.) - so it is more childlike in appearance as well. I have a feeling that would make it even more poignant, if you tread carefully while doing it.

I do absolutely see the difference Rainman referred to in your other poem. I did read it but did not vote or leave a comment. This by far a "better" poem in many ways.

keep on writing, you have it in you, just need to be able to see it:)

The beauty and innocence of a child, well done through the eyes of knowledge. Thank you

its gorgeous.