All Comments on 'Old Vows Long Remembered'

by meurdrac

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meurdracmeurdracalmost 3 years agoAuthor

I love these points. Thank you (much belatedly).

These were vows once taken. But I will confess that the "vows" part of any marriage ceremony absolutely ruins the whole experience for me. Sometimes, certain vows will haunt me for days. Honestly, I think I could take the couple attempting to do a "rap-off" competition with their vows (at one another) much better in many instances. So, as I wrote these vows, I wrote them with a specific woman in mind, but I leaned on those cliches because (aren't vows themselves cliches?) I thought they would be the least awfui of various approaches (to which I can perform). When I finished, I read them, and I only half-winced (but I didn't feel like they ruined the moment).

That was improvement enough and voila!!

Thank you very much for reading and sharing.

M

tazz317tazz317over 11 years ago
FOR ONE OR BOTH

to remember and follow the rules....Wow. TK U MLJ LV NV

HarryHillHarryHillover 11 years ago
Thats not Vanilla

but it may be sttrawberry. like the simplicity

DesejoDesejoover 11 years ago

I like the structure and flow, and the theme is nice. I think it could be stronger if you used less common ways of expressing some of the lines; eg always and forever, even to the last breath, protect and defend, beating heart . Wondering about your title choice too - it makes me wonder if this is about marriage, or patriotism? hmmm.

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