All Comments on 'orgasmic rains'

i'll be resubmitting this poem tomorrow, i know it needs some work!

i thought i had deleted the thing before i went to bed last night so it wouldn't get submitted, thats what i get for thinking i guess!

~rolls eyes~

take some of it out and keep the best. This is just one example:

thunder canyon echoes,

enchanting morning petals

still glistening with sprinkles

of thunder's windless rest.

another storm

still rising,

howling whispers.

watered flower's scent,

hypnotic fragrance,

eyes closing,

lips touch fresh silk

with reverence.

ah, the cleansing,

as rains of thunder canyon,

wash again the numb,

awakening titillating

yearnings.

hope to read more in the future....has the tone I enjoy reading....much thanks...blue

great phrases and nice meter. images are interesting