All Comments on 'Perfection~'

Short, but just as sweet as ever, my LilDarlin. Terse and to the point. Which point?

as a suggestion, think about taking out the weaker lines,

so you have a compact visual package of four stanzas of three lines each, or adding one line, and re-arranging for that block effect.

very very good poem Lil~

excellent imagery...grin

Good poem! Makes one thinks of a lot of things :)

nice imagry hun, reminds me of the pink floyd orchid image in "the wall"

This is the most interesting poem of yours that I have so far read.

You really do seem to be learning and improving from all the reading you have been doing!

Do take twelveoone's comment about structure and balance seriously.

You can make this an even stronger poem. :rose:

this was a really good shot at what you were aiming for. i think you could have taken it a little more to a peek, just to lead one on more. also, the pluck, kind of took a little of the feel out. it was good though

I especially like the "pollinations course" line, a real masterstroke!

yes indeed,

you must be

that perfect rose;

and I must start

to my study of

horticulture.