All Comments on 'Predawn'

Good but could perhaps be improved a little .For examples. Too many 'somes' perhaps - you could say 'some sharp some smooth others slick as (note only one as). You actually do drop the (some some) for (some others) later in the piece.

I wondered if you thought of leaving out the last line out altogether just letting the poem trail off into...

Fun to read and easy to play with, adding a couple of lines to suit ( this readers) fancy.

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