by Bill Dada
you come up with the most unique and original ideas BD!
kisses,
~LB~
I really like this piece. Your style always captures my mind and takes it on a journey. The stream of consciousness word play you put out here gives us a peek into our own souls and makes me wish for everything all at once. Thanks for sharing this with us.
like a pair of new jeans...framed into a nice shapely body...clever and witty ...like the style...blue
Had to catch my breath after that one. Jam packed imagery in a finely tuned delivery. Thanks Bill
that was way to much DADA <GRIN> A CARTOON POEM? either way this was one wild literary journey <ty b>
I love it Bill. A bit dark on tha first read, but then I get it. A lotta fun, and very witty. Just me ~ grins*
Again ... Great imagery here. Your opening line pulls the reader in and takes us on a rollercoaster ride full of wit, and even a deep thought or two. Nice ... Very nice ~!!
More,
if you please ~ * flowers *
The bombardment of such vivid imagery packed so tightly made me breathless. It's a neat piece to read aloud. I kept trying to decode it though ... thinking if I paused at just the right collocation, I would see all things clearly. ;) Nice job!
Luck,
Yui
this poem is mentioned in the New Poem Review Thread:
http://www.literotica.com:81/forum/showthread.php?p=15098747&posted=1#post15098747
with density... reading that in one breath had my head spinning at the end. One element I look for in prose poetry is a density of either images, or metaphor, or just stuff... this one has all that. Good stuff...
jim : )